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Janne Genezis
(Genezis)

Good attempt at a soft, gloomy tune. Nice melody and appropriate sound effects (e.g. ocean), and average skill with the panning. However, I can't highly recommend it because of two things: 1) its "flat" sound, and 2) sample quality. The overall mood of the song is rather uninteresting because it basically sticks to one simple descending chord progression and just layers instruments. And, the sample quality is poor, especially considering that the song was only about 617 KB. For example, the opening piano is fuzzy and grainy---you would expect for the very first instrument that the listener hears that it would be perfectly in tune and perfectly clear. It just sounds like a scratched record. So, how can you improve upon what is there: 1) play with the volumes to lower the background tones to highlight piano solos, 2) add more interesting, varied percussion to sound more like a real human was playing it rather than a drum machine, 3) don't do rapid pitch slides with choir instruments (people don't do that with their voices), 4) vary the chord structure a little bit so the song has discernable sections to it. Good effort.

Good song structure, beginning and ending worked fine. The middle was slightly bland though, but that can be expected of such ballads. :) Some samples were of mediocre quality.

*File Specs* [Additional vote] ... [Filename]m6i-fwql.it [Title]Farewell quit Life [General comment]How should i take the song concept? As melodrama where someone leaves the scenario with happy thoughts about the life he/she had lived or as condamned drama where the roll-cast decides to leaves his/her scenario by taking the easiest shortcut:death? Never mind, the sfx are nice but why birds and not seagulls? (I hear sea but i also hear forest birds near the shore?!?), the way you have set up your song in the whole frame is good but your song-culture is a bit ruling too much from the start to the end. (your progression is getting boring) but you understand the essence of changing the song-mood, now try to do the same with motifs; Rythm:acceleration/slowing down/breaking instantly, chord progression:change keys more often/use more keys in a row than only four/change supporting baseline to create another angle of background support motif, baseline:make it dynamical by inserting melodical aspects into the baseline, this will create a good variating baseline and makes your song sound more dynamical, not only that, it brings in more inspiration:The more recursively energy you put in your song, the more ideas you get back from it.(ewps :( now i just gave away a very important secret) Okay put more emotion into it than it already has, the tears really have to roll over my cheeks, you get the picture?

Those piano samples are very noisy. I get the feeling you downsampled them just a bit too much. The bass string is a little off-key. It sounded right when I set its frequency to about 6505. That progression of chords gets old very early on in the song. More variation would have been welcome here. The slowdown at the end was well suited.

Almost all samples are of low quality, and the overrall sound suffers noticeably from this. Chord progression gets repetitive quite quickly, since I have already heard it a few thousand times. Mixing is very good, all sounds are clearly distinguishable. With better samples, better coordination and a fresher approach to chords this one could have been a lot better.