by

Erik tweety
(tweety)

I don't understand why the tune portamento's in at the beginning, the reasoning behind this is lost on me. This tune is cutesie, cheesy, if anything very Japanese. The bellsynth used for the chords is too overpowering as seems to be the trend in the rookie and intermediate entries. Better use of volumes and layering of the sound would make this tune easier to listen to. Samples are tuned, and panning is average. The panning could be improved by not relying on envelopes too much, especially with thick chords as you can hear the chord move from one ear to the other. Dispurse your panning by creating 2 or 3 instruments using the same sample and giving an envelope opposite of the previous one, and alternate the use of this instrument for each note of the chord. It's finally good to see a bridge in the entries I am listening to, even though the chord samples could have been dropped a bit in volume. The trumpet sound doesn't fit in well as the lead. It would have been better to use a smoother sample like a synth lead. The ending doesnt seem to work with the chord the author chose, and it goes on for too long. Patterns 14, 15, 16 use some clashing chords, perhaps using softer volumes may have helped smooth this out and make it easier to accept. Perhaps more time needed to be spend on this tune. Also provide a more interesting ending instead of just fading out would help. Good choice of title which matches the song well.

You sure have skills composing. The intro of your song is original with the voices at channels 19,20 & 21. But later in the tune, the same voices become really boring. The chords you use are not bad but they last for more half of the song (20 patterns). A bit borring too. Last with the sample, the "saxo" sample you use on channels 17,18 don't really fit to the music. It's too synthetic. Your samples are not bad though but not enough various i think. It is a pretty happy song but too repetitive. I seems like you had an original tune ("This is what is on my mind" :) ), but then you didn't cudgel your brain any longer.

A module with a silly atmosphere. The rhytm is cool but repetitive. No real stereo usage here. No major flaws. Sorry for this VERY short comment but I just realised that the actual deadline is at Sun 10/8 00:00 GMT instead of Sun 10/8 24:00 GMT! I'm terrible sorry.

A potentially really good upbeat song is let down by the trumpet (?) line which drags it down way too often, and end is too uninspired and repeats itself too often before fading out. Snap out of it, you ruined a perfectly good upbeat song with those 2 major bad flaws. Most of the samples are fairly good apart from #5 which has way too much background hiss for my liking. Not bad track but could potentially be a lot better.

Alvin & the Chipmunks meets Kenny G. The vocals are distracting. Did you intend for this to be funny? That's the only reason I can think of that you would purposely speed up the vocals. Apart from that, musically this is pretty unimaginative. The reedy echoey lead just sort of wavers around, like an intoxicated Kenny G practicing naked in his bathroom. The ending is a broken record.