by

Christian OPI
(OPI)

That watery woosh sound got too repeatitive. Most of the stuff in the the song was repeated way to often. The vocals were good, but it could have used some more lyrics though. Hearing "First time I ever saw you, was in a sweet summertime. I wish I never laid my eyes on you." repeated about a dozen times did get boreing. The bridge (the vibes), did not sound right. Having an instrument being sustained for that long, not only made my computer slow down, but made the music sound clutered, and un-professional. The most interesting thing you did was the key change. The guitar (or whatever that was), did sound good, but (again), was too repeatitive. In general... the song was too repeative! And just some parts of the song just didn't sound right. My best advice, is listen to your song very carefully. Don't be afraid to erase anything. That is what makes the difference bettween an amature and a professional composer. Amatures think that once they put a note on their music, they don't want to remove it. Notes are not sacred! If it doesn't sound right (even a little bit), get ride of it! It tolk me a while to learn this, but it makes a difference. If you have an idea that is not that good, keep it anyway. You will find something to do with it later. Aside from that, work a lot on your music. Spend a lot of time on the same song. The more time you spend on it, the better. For some really good tracking advice, go to "www.hornet.org", and go to "The Zen of Tracking".

Again, Rookie. C maj / A min mainly, with awful, loud drumline. Too simple and too loud. No basses - hollow sound. Annoying high frequencies. No panning (only some instr. envelopes), only several mood changes. If the vocals are authors, they, I must agree, are far better than the rest of the tune. Even some arrangement work witnessed :) However, sounds hollow and gloomy. Too repetitive theme and vocals. Lead sine even have some FX remnants applied :) I'm very sorry, why not in a M6R category ? Samples are ok, could be better. Vocals are good. Overally - gloomy and repetitive, with some unopened talent shown.

nice panning on the intial sample. I like the bell melody, too. The percussion, tho, is really lacking. It's too hard compared to the rest of the song, and isn't terribly excitiing either. Vocals are good, especially considering the limitations of the medium. I don't think I care for the retriggering cymbal to lead into the crash. Leads are acceptable, but repetative. Key change at order 18 feels forced. Leads in order 24 don't sound completely in tune. The siner lead in order31 is nice, but after four years in the demoscene, one gets a bit tired of hearing them. :) Overall, a good effort. Percussion needs some work, leads could establish a more catchy melody, chord changes could transition better.

Although the beat is little shaky, the voice is really awesome. The sound is personnal, but sometimes inadequate : try to write some bass lines and variations using a signifiant progression. Construction is nearly insipid, but much fun :) Work more your ending.

Nice enough intro. That beat is horrible! It must be my machine, surely! Seems to stutter. Voice is good. That harp-sounding backing is ggod but goes on for the whole song and gets boring after a while. Song needs to build up to a more powerful climax. Maybe it's just personal preference but the song seems to chug along at the same level. Perhaps it's the harp that is always playing that keeps it sound the same throughout but I would have really loved soome powerchords or something similar for a really punchy couple of lines of lyrics. This would have put a lot of emotion behind the lyrics and accentuated their meaning. I mean, do you REALLY whish you'd never layed your eyes on them? The power would have punched home the meaning. Overall nice idea. Needed a bit of variety. Probably shouldn't have put the lyrics over the chord change at 2 mins. Need to make this part more unique. Some of the lead ideas sound cheesy and amateurish. Work on developing better melodic ideas. Definitely needs work on the drums!

the vocals in this song are pretty good, tho necessarily repetative. the drum beats, as well, are noticeably broken up. the biggest problem with the vocals tho is that they're not very audible over the other parts of the song. in general the volume mixing is the most noticible fault in the song: some of the harsher sounds are played too loudly and drown out other parts, and worse there's little variation of the volume of the various sounds throughout the song. but i applaud your effort at using vocals and hope you'll keep trying it regardless of whatever feedback you get on this.

tssk tssk tssk... insufficient soundcard RAM on my GUS to hear this song. The long 16 bit vocals are hogging up entire 256k RAM banks, forcing out the other samples. It sort of goes against the 1,000,000 byte works-for-everybody rule if it doesn't fit in GUS RAM. You probably didn't know that though, so I won't mark off for it, I'll just bitch about it. I'll listen to the song in my old SB now... OK, now that I can hear all the samples... You (or whoever) have a nice singing voice... the ending is really bad, the song just sort of stops, on an irritating chord nonetheless. Without vocals it's basically a copy -> paste -> paste -> paste job with only a few things to break the monotony... well, it sounds nice, I shouldn't use the word monotony. It's basically a nice average song.