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Risto-matti Silent man
(Silent man)

The intro could be better if it was not so in-order. The slower tempo makes it a bit choppy. The drumloop runs up very strongly. Then You repeated the same chords until the 12th pattern, it's boring, the melody isn't vivid enough to make the main part more interesting. But the chord change in the pattern 13 is in place, probably this is the finest moment of the whole song. The technical side is average in the rookie division. The sound is rather mono, You should use some panning all around... That drumloop does not fit the tune so well. Use tracked drum sequence next time, or try to create a stereo sound by putting it into 2 tracks + set sample offset and side pannings. There are some tricks You should learn, use better samples, these ones are very noisy and at low samplerate. If you track such a style, don't let Your melody be affected by the chords. This time I noticed some copy&paste job, You used the same stuff in many patterns, just changed the melody. Wrong. The melody must be the leader, the chords and the whole arrangement has to follow the melody. Don't be afraid also to make tempo changes. OK, that's all for now, I hope You will improve in these cases and show some better song next year. Good luck!

Simple but effective intro. Nice samples, no disharmonies! This tune has an exceptionally (for a rookie tune) good feel to it, and it gets powerful without overdoing. The solo could have been done more subtle (it got a tad tiresome after a while). But it was a good tune by all means. Keep it up!

Mysetrious 80's pop? The leads are good, pattern 7, channel 15 is meaningless. You need to increase the volume on intrument 5 and 15. Good originalityscore. Farily in the 'form'section, it ends too suddenly. Ok technique, but don't change the speed in the middle of a pattern. Your drumloops doesn't fit in.

Pattern 12-13 and 16-17 are too loud, and covers the great idea of the intro theme. Samples are of good quality, even if most of them are known to experienced tracker. Suggestion: try to do your own set of samples, and equalize better the volumes when the main theme is mantained together with percussions and choirs.

The chord progression is repetitive. Flipping through the song patterns with the "+" key, it seems as though you cut-pasted a good amount of the song, and added a simple lead. However, the piece is well crafted, in that the lack of chord progression is not severely noticeable. The lead and the bells are well written. The ending is weak.

A nice entry! Would have benefitted from a contrasting section in the middle and some more effects on the lead (and maybe a different sample, it was kind of irritating at times), but the melodies are very good and the backing is also quite good. My favorite of the rookie entries i was assigned.