by

David Kyp
(Kyp)

You are a skilled tracker. I rate the technical show of Your song very positive. Your used the tempo swing well. Your drum variation are excellent, they fill the song with dynamism. So, You are a fine arranger, Your samples are nice, clean and fit the song, but two of them are a bit strangely looped. The melodic content is a bit worse. There are some nice ideas, but this song could be a lot better. There is no carrying melody. The people would not remember this tune after some hours, because they could not find any catchy motives in it. Try to fill your songs with more harmony and enter the veteran division next year.

It's original enough(hehe) You use way too many channels for one instument. Your rythms are really bad. The tune has no 'structure', it's a mess. The samples are a bit old. Form & technique - fair.

Nice original sounding pop-tune. Overall, this piece sounded ok, obviously time was spent in tracking this. I suppose this deserves a decent score for effort, since the drums are well tracked. However the piece progresses in a confusing manner. Cute "Pools of Poison"ish ending :)

Fancy tracking, especially for a rookie. I like the flow... It's all quite unique and expressive. I don't like the samples: too chippy. I would comment more, but I'm upset about the "3", "2", "1", "BYE", ":)" at the end of the song...

You had a good idea, but there were a lot of out of tune melodies in the song, although your drums were well worked out. You show some good skill with melodies but its a pity that when you added everything else, it all seemed to be incoherent, especially the flute part with piano and bass, all horrible out of tune... Try this, tune all your samples to sound like one sample, Ie, play the first sample at C-4 , and then play with the frequency of all the other samples till they all sound the same as the first one, this makes it harder to play things out of tune, as a D# and an E would obviously not sound good. Good luck.

An excellent song, very well mixed. Much more innovative than the vast majority of the songs I listened to so far in the contest. The themes are well-presented and developed.

Original idea. The whole idea is strangely unique, and catchy. A well written song. I thought that there were some problems with the song, however. The biggest problem that stuck in my mind is that the song did not have an intro, and just jumped right into the song. I think a better intro would help the song greatly. The samples fit the song and I could not find a simgle one that did not fit to the song. Good selection of instruments. They really made the song enjoyable. Overall a very good song.