by

Janne Vortex Of Crystalline
(Vortex Of Crystalline)

An interesting ochestrated based song. The low quality samples and its seemly never-ending or changing chord progression kept it from being a tune one would gladly add to their modest collection of songs. It had some interesting ideas and pauses in the song, but lacked a theme a listener could follow. Perhaps a sudden change at order #30 could have helped. Song structure is also a key element this song lacked. Example, as you approach the end part of the song it's kind of like writing a conclusion of an essay. You want to summarize what happened earlier in the song, but without literally repeating what has been played before. Think of it as a climax, and the song is your story. Also never add something new to the end of a song. Hope these few hints help out.

the intro part doesn't merge with the start of the song well. the song is nice, and in an unusual style. but the form is a little jumbled and not always "musically correct". the chords starting around the 2:00 point are set to too quick a decay rate. the piano sounds nice, and is written nicely. the whole composition is a little tense. the ending does not fit anywhere either, really. and the tuning of the samples is a little off. your tracking technique is good, though. you used instruments and panning nicely. you just need to put more focus into your work. more melody and more feeling. the song should transfer from section to section smoothly.

The author of this song needs to spend some more time on the tonal dynamics of the piece which is forgivable given that it is a rookie entrant. The author has come up with quite a few good ideas but they have been a bit overused and require more variety and exploration. The song also appears to lack direction as there doesnt appear to be a leading melody or anything to carry throughout the piece. Works well in parts however.

Stereo was disabled when I started this song, so I enabled it. I hope that's what you intended. The piano part doesn't really sound like something you'd usually hear played, especially because of the echo. A lot of piano songs in tracker format overdo the echo badly, and I think you may have fallen into that trap, since a realistic piano part should really have a left and right hand and more than one note playing at once, so that they don't have to rely on echo to produce a full sound. The song has faded out and now the chords played remind me a bit of a pipe organ. Again at order 60 another awkward fadeout and the song continues as if nothing has happened. In summary I think you need some work on your transitions. This song is in some parts major, and in some minor, which is not necessarily bad and in some parts you made good use of the harmonic minor scale. Again, like several of the rookie songs I've heard, I think you've achieved a nice degree of originality, but your samples are not the best. The form is interesting but I am not sure whether I like the chord progressions in this song, so rating that area will be tricky for me.

The beginning was pretty light, and nothing that I'd object to, but then you threw in the bass drum. Just take it out, as there is no need to have it in at that point; you develop your song well enough later on, that you don't need to have the deep thumping everyplace....From pattern 26-32, there's a minor part that doesn't seem to fit. Some people may think that I'm being overly picky with such a thing, though. 30-32 sounds blatent, though....Overall, it's pretty good. The song flows well enough from place to place, although it could use more of a transition than just dropping one section, practically stopping the song, and then starting the new sectoin. Also, it was nice to see some volume usage, although more wouldn't hurt it....Panning would help things, as well.