by

Per Henrik

Very disjointed piece of music, it changed so much that the listener is left with no overall feeling or idea. There are some good patterns namely 12-20, but some patterns are not very well constructed at all, being out of key and not really sounding like music. Patterns 31 and 33 onwards sound pretty bad with the melody your using not fitting with the rest of the instruments. Stick to the good bit of your song and build on that, don't try to put too many ideas into your song at once.

Really impressive ! The sample choice is personnal, the atmosphere is very interesting. Some lacks in harmony, especially about the bass line pat.15 to 24, but all is right. Great use of voice sample, effective and discreet. There are good ideas ; work a little more on your changing parts. Stereo work gives more depth again. Your ending strikes, flastly. Daring. Undoubtedly, you should had entry for intermediate category !

The marimba samples at the beginning are out of tune. In fact most of the samples are out of tune. The excessive use of dissonance in this song is excessive. By the end I was wondering what the Grom theme was exactly. Try writing a simple melody. About two minutes in it sounds as if you're about to supply one but then stop short before you let anything substantial develop.

Tune your samples! This is the first song I've listened to in a long time that cause me physical pain to listen to...and it's not because the song was bad. Tune your samples! There were some reeeally nice parts in this song: orders 12->24 andorders 26->34. Mainly, these parts of the song were not offensive. If you had played your song more around these parts I could have easily doubled your score, but the rest of your song was so out of tune, or had such strong disonnance that it brought down the rest of the song.

a bit random and hard on the ears at first. some of the chords seem to clash, especially when the voice comes in.

[originality:] This piece gets marks for originality, but little else. Despite the constant disheveled sound of the piece, the vaguely interesting (yet abrupt) transitions kept the piece somewhat interesting (in a side-show sort of way). [form:] This piece was too non-cohesive to contain much form; it sounds very random and the range of expression is quite limited. It almost sounds like music generated by fractals. There is a mood lurking underneath this tune somewhere, but I can't find it until all of the jaggies are scraped away. [technique:] I liked the percussion at the beginning of the tune. Therein lies the tribal mood of this piece; but the composer deteriorates into a random mess of clashing leads and sloppy progressions. The only thing I can think to suggest is to learn more music theory (if I practiced what I preached, I'd actually be qualified to say this :) [sample quality:] The tribal percussion samples are well-chosen, and the instruments used are pretty cool. They just need to be used with a good sense of control and experience.