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Eddie j0e_bl0w
(j0e_bl0w)

The first thing I noticed was you had two chords... that were played by BASS intruments. One thing you have to realize, the lower the notes you go, the closer together the notes are. So the chords (or bass), did not sound that great at all. That is something you might want to avoid, having "bass chords". Listen to some other peoples stuff and see what they did. 2nd: The drum beat was too ordinary, too boring. It also might have been a good idea to change the drums beat a little more often. 3rd: When you decided to have a lead of some sort, it sounded REALLY accidental. Let it have some form. Listen to some other peoples stuff and see what they did. 4th: The second lead that you had, wasn't hitting all the notes in the key that you were using. Which I succesfully made out to be the key of C Mixolydian (Mixolydian is the name of a mode where the 7th note in the scale is flatended), at least that is whet your chords were doing... your leads on the other hand were playing a different mode, called Dorian. Same thing as Mixolydian but the 3rd note is flatened. Playing a D-4, over a D#4 does not sound good at all. 5th: You only used two chords (bass chords in this case). Try and be a little more creative and surpise you listener. 6th: Have more instuments playing. Having only a Bass, drum kit, and lead part does not sound rich at all. 7th: Try and add some real chords. Again, listen to what other people did. 8th: When you determine what key you are in, make sure all the note LAND on that key. 9th: The song was too repetative. It seemed to be playing the same thing over again for the entire 4:30+ minutes. 10th: The time limit for the judges was 4 minutes, so try and make the song 4 minutes long. 11th: Try and learn more about music theroy and learn as much as you can about music. Again... listen to what other people did in their songs, and apply what you have learned in your own music. ...12th: Impule Tracker has something called NNAs (New Note Actions). That would have been helpful in composing you song. Instead of using 3 tracks for one instument, let the NNAs do it for you. I will make the tracks neater and easier to change/compose. 13th: Practice.

There's good sound in this module, and a coherent atmosphere too. But I think you wanted to make it too experimental. Hard to put different harmonies simultaneously : it really hurts in pattern 70. The falling sin-wave in the beginning is too loud. The theme becomes unfortunately monotonous : except in order 60, you made no drum variation, nor bridge or something what could break the no-ending loop. Your sound is quite original, so why did you use this old-well-known DX7 flute ? It makes it nearly caricatural. Original work, but not very easy to approach.

Poor percussion. The lack of properly tuned instruments ruined what could've been a better effort. Try not to use a fade out ending, especially when you use a piano as your lead instrument; any sort of cadence would be better. Try changing/expanding the piano theme. It's too repetitive and hard to listen to now. Condensing this song into two or three minutes would do it a world of good. There's a lot of unnecessary patterns throughout. Shorter songs can be great, often better than their longer counterparts.

Pick your sample set wisely. It is -very- important that your samples go together well in a song. You cannot just simply throw a bunch of samples together, basing them on being "a bass drum" or "a piano". They must song good as a whole. Also you cannot just throw a bunch of different ideas together. The drum trak itself was pretty sad -- really simple and boring. You needed to add some variation to it to keep the listener interested. But besides that, you cannot just plop different melodies on top of this same drum trak with no warning and with no reason. There must be a progression to the song. Half the time you spend writing your song should be listening to what you've already written and then planning what should come next. Do not put down stuff on a whim.

nice sound. chords are a little rough: i dont think they were intended to be played at such a low pitch. the piano parts are a bit monotonous, and seem out of tune (moreso with the electric piano than the normal one). was expecting something more exciting later on. there are some good ideas in here, but the tracking technique needs some work, as sometimes it dips into cacophony.