by

Ronald M The Nightstalker
(The Nightstalker)

The start was promising, but unfortunately that synthpop part in the middle is very very very bad. The percussion is hopeless (the ride cymbal is noisy and destroys much). BUT: When you slow things down at the end there, everything suddenly starts making sense. Your percussion gets much better, and the lead is quite nice and the ending is also good. (one is left to wonder whether you're schizophrenic or if this is a co-op:)) You could have done without the thunder FX. All in all: if you had removed the fast synthpop part in the middle and just made the whole tune like the endpart, this would have got a way better grade than it did.

For rookie material, this is a very nice song but you definitely need to work with details. Volume slides, effects, etc.. This song actually reminds me of some of my own older stuff (don't be too offended :)).. Here are some of my notes: Percussion is a little "hardcore" for this style.. ease up a bit and let them move along with the background instead of defining what the background is doing.. in the same sense, the hi-hats are extremely loud (common problem) and even a little scratchy... Arpeggiate chords.. don't just slam them down on beats, add _details_ and tweak them a bit more... Samples.. the slap-bass sample didn't really fit IMO, and the piano sample was nice but sounded familiar... Form/Details... the overall structure of the tune was fine although I wouldn't necesarily end it with a ritard.. also, the transitions around order 14/15/16, don't fit as well as they could.. try something a little different than just going down a step or two... minor details: around 2:30 you could fade out the lead and let the piano do "its stuff".. and around 2:50 the strings could use some vol slides/effects...around order 18, the change shows that the tune/author has real potential... overall, good stuff.. just start tweaking and focusing on the little things that make a tune 'unique'...

Samples don't really fit in with the rest of track at all, and sound very out of place. Some samples are not tuned on each other.

This song has some atmosphere and relatively good sample set, altough clearly ripped. Bass is just horrible. There is more to playing bass guitar than slapping, you know. I think the beat should be more "rocking" for this kind of music. Not many flaws harmony-wise, for a rookie (I won't reduce your score for a few poor voicings or inversions). You show some potential, be sure to practice. I don't want to miss the things you will do after a few years.

The song isn't very exciting even though it seems like it's trying ot be. maybe haveing a stronger drumbeat would help. May some different more unique samples and some volslides would help.