by

Heikki Jammax
(Jammax)

Once again we have a tune with a bassline that does not fit in. I also think you should have chosen an other solution than a sine bass (a slaphand, perhaps). But the tune is quite original and powerful, interesting chanting at the beginning there. All in all a decent effort.

The volumes of most of the instruments are too high and end up droning each other out. When you can make out the song and melody it sounds alright, but usualy everything sounds very messy. Drums are not really coherant, you should settle for a variation of one beat throughout the song with perhaps one or two change ups. The backing melody stays throughout the whole song which is repetitive and becomes very monotonous. The voice sample is used once or twice, which is lucky since it doesn't really fit in with the rest of the song. The bass at the start is not in tune with the rest of the song. When you use a voice sample, make sure you get good use out of it throughout the song, never just play it once or twice. Too many ideas all jumbed together in this one, try adn be more focused. The lead instrument and strings are well chosen for the title and mood though so work on that.

This was a bit worse than I expected. Some of the loops were downright noisy, and your use of the closed hihat (tick - tick - tick - tick) didn't make for a really interesting drum line. Try synchopating it a bit more. The drums were overamped (I had to adjust my mixing volume a few times)--and what wasn't overamped was out of tune (especially the voice samples--they were horribly flat...) Your panning was probably one of the more redeeming qualities of your song. The song did solidify to a point towards the end, but it still seemed to be a bit noisy and dissonant--the not-so-good kind of dissonant. (It's hard to do the good kind and even harder to do it inadvertantly.) Your bassline could have benefitted from a bit more variation. Ask someone that you know is a good tracker to help you learn to tune samples--your songs will benefit. Oh, and by the way, the bird samples added a good mood to your song. However, I was expecting something a bit harder and lonlier. :P

Alot to work on for this piece: You layed down a decent background track (despite the fact that the bass sample was WAY out of tune and that the drums didn't really fit the style too well) and just layered things without much shape or form that could lead to something else.. for example, after 3:15, you're still using the same basic progression with nothing new or obvious coming out of it.. there was enough use of tracker effects and basic musical qualities to warrant this score but try to develop correlating progressions instead of just layering ontop of one, and be a bit more consistent with harmonies/flow...

The bassline is awful! Seems like it was played in wrong key or something. It took me some time before I got used to it... The effect on the flute solo is well done why haven't you used more panning in your song? There are some harmonic errors in the solo that comes after the flute. The tune is very monotonous. I couldn't get rid of the thought is't about two times too long...

Overall a fair 'rookie' entry that I did enjoy. The 'form' wasn't bad. There's an alarming amount of loops. A little more smoothing on the Sample 25 part would've been good. CH 19,20 don't really fit in with the rest of track at all, and sound very out of place. Still quite a good effort for a rookie entry.