by

Jeremy JRice
(JRice)

One of the first things I notice in the song, was that the fade out of the strings was too slow. You also only used two chords through the entire song, and the notes in those chords were too far a part. I think that if you filled in the chords (and used a more sophisticated chord progression), that might have hightened the feel of the song (for a good example of good filled- in chords, download m6r-mome.zip). The SineWave Bass could have changed every once in a while, however it was a good riff, but repeated too often. My main complaint, is the use of repeativeness. You had a good idea, but you didn't introduce any new ones. I did composed music just like this... and one thing I HAD to learn is this, "You can't base your entire song on a simple 2 chord progression, you need to expand you ideas". I have made 13 "early" songs, that I composed by basing it on a 2 chord progression. My 14th song was composed a year and a half later, when I learned this lesson... it was entered into MC6. When you compose again, if you get a good idea... save it, and work on it some more. The BEST advice I can give anyone on this subject, is compose LEAD FIRST!!! The first thing people listen too in your song is the lead melody. If your lead melody is based on a 2 chord progression, the song will sound less professional. So try that on your next song. It might be hard, but I am sure that it will be your best song... it was for mine. Aside from that, just listen to your song VERY carefully. Listen to your song, and be AS CRITICAL AS POSSIBLE!!! If something doesn't sound even a LITTLE bit right, change it! Just practice and learn as much about music and music theory as you possibly can. I have been in the same shoes as you, and that is the best advice I can give. Just compose... A LOT, and never stop composing if it something you truely enjoy!

A very good song. It progresses well throughout. The addition of the snare near the end is a nice touch. The subdued ending fits perfectly.

Very mellow and cool sounding but the melody you bring in at order 8 lacks impetus. The notes you use are not the powerfu;l ones in the scales that the chords suggest. Try using triad notes and sevenths for interest (either major or minor sevenths depending on the chord) The build up to order 30 is good but order 30 should have been climax rather than a soft pattern. You promise but don't give. OK at the start of a song but near the end you need to give all. Good samples. Nice soft beat. Overall nice idea that doesn't catch my ear melodically (common theme among the songs I've judged. They tend to lack a memorable melody).

the beginning of the song sounds a bit sparse and rough. the bass kicks in and you think "oh cool", but then you hear all the nna action on it and you think "gross". principle #9531 on the 31337d00dz list of tracker rules states "thou shalt not use copious nnas on thy bass samples lest thy inflict waves of horrible mud upon thy listeners ears." in general, it has a good pace and progression through different parts. however, the samples don't all work together well.

This is a very laid back tune. There's nothing to grab your attention. It is better described as background music. There's a rather atmospheric feel to it. Some good use of panning envelopes, though good to see they're not soley relied on for panning. The tune gets a bit stale after a while though, it probably needs soemthing like a key change, as the chord progression goes on for too long. The author seems like they know how to use IT well, I'd like to see some more music from him/her. Samples are tuned, orchestration is ok, it's just very average sound.